2012年1月31日星期二

Please help me finish a conclusion paragraph for my persuasive essay!?!?! 10 pts?

ESSAY: Though hard to believe, Simplyteeth.com states that each year people spend approximately $5 billion on chewing gum; this seems to be a major waste of money, but is it really? Traditionally, gum is thought of as nothing more than a candy, thus most schools do not permit students to chew it in class. Schools do not favor gum, or any form of candy, because they view it as a distraction. However, recent research found benefits of students chewing gum in school, that out weigh the minor faults. These new findings prove that several solutions to our childrens’ health and academic problems, can be found in their candy, gum. Schools should permit students to chew gum, because it can improve the obesity issues, oral health, and learning abilities of students.

Even though most people think the opposite, chewing gum in school can help students fight and prevent obesity. Contemporary analysis describes chewing gum, as an effective component in weight loss and management routines. One study published in The Energy Expended in Chewing Gum, found that chewing gum can increase metabolism rates by up to twenty percent. Meaning that students, by chewing gum, could naturally burn more calories faster than they would if they did not chew gum. Students would have less calories to burn in the first place if they chewed gum in class, prior to lunch. Science shows that chewing gum curves our appetite, because the brain can not tell the psychological difference between chewing gum and eating, causing us to eat less. An experiment, conducted by The University of Liverpool, concluded that on average someone who chews gum prior to having a snack, will eat thirty six fewer calories than someone who does not. Each hour a person spends gum, they burn an extra eleven calories. Thus simply by chewing gum the class period before lunch, a student can unconsciously spare themselves forty seven calories. By chewing gum in school students will speed up their metabolism, as well as take in less and burn more calories, all elements that can improve record high obesity rates.

Chewing gum in school can also enhance a student’s oral health. To maintain healthy oral hygiene, dentists recommend that we brush our teeth after every meal. However in schools, after lunch, students do not have access to a toothbrush; an obvious indication that their oral health is suffering. If students could chew gum in school, the severity of this problem would significantly decrease, because chewing a stick of gum can, can similarly to brushing, clean teeth by removing food debris. Gum also contributes to a healthy mouth through the action of chewing, which triggers a faster, steady flow of saliva. According to simplyteeth.com, this extra boost of saliva movement can banish harmful acids that lead to tooth decay. Allowing students to chew gum in school will make their next trip to the dentist easier, for they will have better overall oral health.

Lastly, students’ learning abilities will improve if they have consent to chew gum in school. Some students need to have some kind of movement in order to focus and constantly tap their foot or pencil, possibly disturbing other students. However, some students may find chewing gum as s silent, less distracting, and more effective substitute for activity. The refreshing splash of flavor from a students gum, will revive the student; giving them a slight inflation of energy, improving their ability to focus on and comprehend the lesson. Students chewing gum in class will also produce an increase of memory, through memory association. For example, if when taking notes in science class students chew spearmint gum, their brain will associate the content of the notes with the flavor of spearmint. Then when taking a science exam, if the students again chew spearmint gum, their brains will recall the taste and connect it to the class material associated with it. Thus resulting in a jog of the students’ memories, so they better remember the information and earn higher test scores. Nutritionist, Gil Leville, declares that chewing gum, boosts the blood flow to the brain by up to forty percent. This extra blood circulating to the brain carries oxygen, which acts as fuel for the brain, ultimately increasing brain function. By chewing gum in class students will satisfy their craving for movement, focus more efficiently, have an extended memory, and increase brain function, ultimately advancing their learning ability.

Schools should approve of students chewing gum in class, because it can enrich the obesity issues, oral health, and learning abilities of students.

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Now, realizing all the benefits of chewing gum, the $5 billion annually spent on gum seems to be more of an investment in health and education rather than a waste. I urge our school districts to reconsider the new found benefits of students chewing

Please help me finish a conclusion paragraph for my persuasive essay!?!?! 10 pts?
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Allowing the students to chew gum would make test scores higher, as the mint stimulates the brain. It would also let districts spend less profit on physical education programs as chewing gum burns calories. Oral health has always been an issue, so the gum cleaning our teeth would make us a lot healthier. As you can see, gum isn't a nuisance, it's an aide in problems around the nation.


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